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Mordeth
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posted 27 October 2004 11:37 AM      $post_id   Email Mordeth   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
here is something new I wrote... but I don't have a title for it yet, I was thinking of somtething like "Sinners"
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we were lost inside
stuck in a mad world
waiting for the end

our lives were short
filled with apathy
taken by greed

we are sinners
with evil minds
and tainted souls

our hearts are cold
consumed with hate
controlled by lust

earth doesn’t want us
heaven won’t have us
thrust down into hell

where we are punished
for our earthly crimes
that we can’t forget

with nowhere to run
we are by ourselves
and forever alone

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so what do you think?


You only truly lose when winning becomes more important than playing.


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Demandred
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posted 30 October 2004 01:25 AM      $post_id   Author's Homepage   Email Demandred   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
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Mordeth
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posted 02 November 2004 03:36 PM      $post_id   Email Mordeth   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
thanks Dem... but that's not quiet what I had in mind... Possible names I have thought of so far are "Sinners" "Iniquity"(as in the theme for that alignment).... and that's all, some more feedback would be nice, especially on what you thought of the poem


You only truly lose when winning becomes more important than playing.


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Demandred
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posted 07 November 2004 01:36 AM      $post_id   Author's Homepage   Email Demandred   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
Hmm, it puts me in mind of some particular class of damned souls, I think, but I can't for the life of me come up with the name. Searching around a bit, Gaki or Jikininki seem to be along the right lines, but not quite what I had in mind, still...
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