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Mordeth
Lord of Flies
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posted 09 October 2005 04:50 PM      $post_id   Email Mordeth   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
Ok, so I am thinking to use either "Let Go" or "Just Leave" as the title for this one, what do you guys think?

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It's over, your time has passed.
It is time to just give in,
Stop pretending to be alive,
And have the courage to let go,

I know you don't want to leave,
And don't believe what I say.
But I don't mean to hurt you,
And I am not here to lie.

Stop making excuses to stay,
I have heard them all before.
And don't run away from me,
You have nowhere left to hide.

Now I am tired of your games,
Don't force me to make you go.
Just get off the fucking stage,
So we can get on with the show.



You only truly lose when winning becomes more important than playing.


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Drizzt Do'Urden
Lord Tranquility
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posted 14 October 2005 09:54 PM      $post_id   Author's Homepage   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
Probably 'Let Go' is the better title.


I make a new vow, one weighed in experience and proclaimed with my eyes open: I will not raise my scimitars except in defense: in defense of my principles, of my life, or of others who cannot defend themselves. I will not do battle to further the causes of false prophets, to further the treasures of kings, or to avenge my own injured pride.


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Ishamael
Throne of Decay
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posted 07 November 2005 08:51 PM      $post_id   Author's Homepage   Email Ishamael   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
Hmmmm, backlog of poems to work through here Mordeth, sorry about that.

I do think 'Let Go' is the better title.

I like this one, and I think the last two lines are the strongest. Very nice.

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Mordeth
Lord of Flies
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posted 09 November 2005 11:49 AM      $post_id   Email Mordeth   Send New Private Message    Reply With Quote 
thanks, I appreciate that Ish, and don't worry about the backlog. I knew I would create one when I posted four at once, but it is not my fault I seemed to be able to finish all four on the same day.


You only truly lose when winning becomes more important than playing.


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